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Some people think that parents should read or tell stories to children. Others think that parents need not do that as children can read books or watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss the both views and give your own opinion. 2017年7月15日大陸A類考題


本題主要涉及的話題是未成年的教育與保護。題目討論的是父母應該給孩子讀書或講故事,還是讓孩子自行閱讀或看電視或電影。


從難度系數上來說,這道題目難度適中,話題和討論對象都很常見,A和G類考試都多次出現,甚至口語考試中也有類似的討論。


可是,看不懂考題的考生很可能作文寫得勉強、疲軟無力,盡管沒跑題。


怎么讀懂這道題目呢?


首先,要知道未成年的教育與保護類題目考官出題角度是圍繞著家庭教育parenting或學校的教育schooling展開。

這道題目是在談論父母要做的事情,所以寫作的核心肯定是論證家庭教育的重要性及不可替代性。


其次,確定題目中給出讓我們討論的家庭教育的方式是reading or telling stories to children,我們就要思考為什么這么做必要。


然后,明確題目中給出的對比討論對象children can read books or watch TV or movies by themselves,思考這么做的利弊。

因為作文思路肯定是側重談論父母對孩子的教育指引,所以這里需要著重考慮孩子自行閱讀或看電視或電影可能產生的問題。


最后,要結合實際生活思考和這道題目相關的熱門issues,比如現在父母忙于工作容易忽略對孩子的日常陪伴和指引。


所以說,如果不思考這些,作文是寫不到位的。


有了以上的分析,我么可以確定這篇作文的寫作方向:analyze the importance of reading or telling stories to children by parents,并可以因此明確文章的結構是有側重的論證結構,寫作重點是主體段落的立論段和讓步段。


一篇作文立論段的個數取決論證內容的需求。這道題我們提出兩個分論點,所以有兩個立論段。


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具體參考范文


While people argue that children today are able to receive information and get entertained by themselves through a variety of resources, such as books or TV programs or movies, I tend to believe in the importance of reading or telling stories to them by parents.

第一個立論段我們提出的分論點是:reading or telling stories to children encourages family bonding.

這個觀點不難現場思考提出,但主要應該是因為復習充分、對話題庫和經典考題的了解而得出。

家庭生活是一個熱門話題,有一道常青考題就是讓考生分析the increasing sense of alienation in the family.

所以說,話題之間的關系很密切,我們備考的一個目的就是認識到這一點,形成一張思路網,應對靈活出題。


Reading or telling stories to children encourage family bonding. In this day and age of busy schedules, there is an increasing sense of alienation in the family, as many working parents tend to spend the majority of their time in the office or even work overtime at home to ensure an advantageous position in the face of stiff competition. Therefore, reading together is simply an enjoyable and easy way for parents to take time out and focus on the family. Children usually feel wanted and loved by listening to the stories from parents, and open-heart and sincere communication can be generated naturally in this case.

第二個立論段我們提出的分論點是:reading or telling stories molds children into becoming readers, and this significantly increases children's potential for academic success as well as lifelong success in general.

這個觀點是針對孩子讀書識字、培養(yǎng)閱讀習慣、提升孩子注意力等方面的論證提出的。

雖然現在科技發(fā)達,信息獲取及娛樂方式多種多樣,但reading or telling stories給孩子帶來的益處是不可取代的。


Furthermore, reading or telling stories molds children into becoming readers, and this significantly increases children's potential for academic success as well as lifelong success in general. Children are more likely to have a better command of language in an early age by learning the pronunciation and vocabulary from parents. It also builds listening skills, increases a child’s attention span, and develops the ability to concentrate. Also, children can be inspired to express themselves more confidently and easily in spoken and written terms.


On the other hand, some claim that children could read stories from books or watch them on TV or in movies. They believe that children should have the freedom of making decisions and judgments. This would be much easier for the parents who are too busy nowadays, but what is worth mentioning is that children today are easily influenced by the poor behaviors and violent images in the mass media, and considering their inborn features of being curious, the accompany and guidance of parents is quite essential.

主體部分的讓步段,也可稱之為駁論段,需要論證children read books or watch TV or movies by themselves.

這么做是為了文章的客觀性和完整度,即辯證的討論。但要注意如上文提到的:論證側重的是可能產生的問題。


To sum up, I believe that, it is always better for the parents as well as the children, if parents read or tell stories to their children, which could ensure quality family time and benefits the literacy and intellectual development of children in a long term.

最后一段進行簡單的總結即可,由于主體段落論證完整無需再補充或升華。


誤以為命中,其實寫作重點完全跑偏


Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 2018年7月28日大陸A類考題


這道題目考試當天,很多同學和老師都說“今天考了犯罪類話題”、“太好了,今天考過下一場就不會出犯罪了”。所以,悲劇接踵而來。


一方面,這道題目只是有committing a crime這個表達,但不屬于犯罪類話題;清醒的同學應該判斷出屬于未成年的教育與保護類話題(請對比上文詳解的第一道題目)。

另一方面,寫作話題是沒有預測性的,就算這一場考的是犯罪,下一場可能繼續(xù),同一個話題考法多了去了,再說本身就十多個話題分類,如果按順序出題,雅思寫作就沒測試意義了。


有了第一道題目的分析,我們知道未成年的教育與保護類話題出題角度就是家庭教育和學校教育,而且parenting和schooling在出題時一個很重的考點就是在言行舉止方面對孩子的約束和指引,這屬于素質教育的范疇。


所以,這道題目在寫作時我們會用到很多相關的表達,比如students’ behaviors,good members of society等。


有的同學可能會說,老師這個題目是預防青少年犯罪吧?是的,但是預防青少犯罪的核心是parenting和schooling的落實,所以這里提醒大家審題還是要通透,對題目的認識要到位。其實,這還是復習的問題。


審題準確度對最終分數至關重要!


有了以上的分析,我們這道題提出的文章中心觀點就是:It takes more efforts to prevent potential juvenile delinquency than relying on rehabilitated lawbreakers.


根據文章寫作方向,我們判斷作文選用的是有側重的文章邏輯結構。這里提醒大家的是主體段落的立論段和讓步段可以根據論證的需求調整先后順序。


本題為了論證的清晰和力度,我們先討論題目中提到的解決方案:People who have been in prison and become good citizens later tend to have better understanding of the severe consequences of violating the law and have a unique perspective of sharing the lesson with others to deter potential crimes… (具體論證見范文)


緊接著,立論段我們提出未成年的教育更在于parenting和schooling:Teaching students how to distinguish between the right and the wrong and how to behave well should be the main responsibility of parents and teachers.

這里需要注意的是講道理,即說明因果關系,到位就可以了,千萬不能為了湊字數而尬聊(說車轱轆話,靠形容詞堆砌)。


切記語言量和信息量一定要匹配。所以,這里提示大家一定要使用具象思維,就是論證出具體的功能、作用、影響等。


因此,文中給出了父母和學校老師具體做的作用:In order to achieve this end, parents should help students know what is important in life, what role they will play in their world and how they are expected to behave. Teachers should teach them how to cooperate with others and how to contribute to the life of their community.


最后,文章總結,強調未成年的教育和保護的核心是parenting和schooling。


具體參考范文:

There are many problems with students' behaviors today, and therefore people claim that students should be reminded of the hazard of committing crimes. While some believe that it should be carried out by rehabilitated lawbreakers, I think it takes more efforts to prevent potential juvenile delinquency.


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沒看懂題目中的偽邏輯,中招


Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 2018年1月13日大陸A類考題


這道題目算是很多考生眼中的難題。原因有二:一方面,這道題涉及的話題和討論對象很多考生可能并不熟悉;另一方面,這道題目的寫作重點或內容可能會讓人覺得抓不住、湊不夠。


其實,這道考題代表的是一種考官出題慣用的操作,給了一個并不矛盾的偽邏輯讓我們掙扎。


舉個簡單的例子:發(fā)展經濟和保護環(huán)境誰更重要?這道題讓我們討論的是:對于員工來說著裝和工作質量誰更重要?


我們提出的觀點是側重支持dress code at work;并在立論段論證了觀點:A dress code is important because employees are representing the company or the organization, and it guarantees the smooth progress of work.


這里要強調的是我們有效的使用了具象思維:具體討論了在不同的工作領域的dress code。


然后,在讓步段我們很客觀的說明了:Employees have seen a shift towards a more casual dress standard, even in industries that were previously very formal.同樣,在這里我們也使用具象思維,給出了具體的工作場所。


最后,我們強調了雇主應該很好的和員工溝通,因為dress code是可以提高the quality at work。


所以說,這道題目并不難,復習到位,真的很容易搞定。但是很可惜,不少迷糊的考生直接把dress code和the quality at work理解成了對立面。


于是出現了類似的內容:員工有權利選擇著裝自由,雇主要考慮員工的感受等。


具體參考范文:

Dress codes are sets of standards that companies develop to help provide their employee with guidance about what is appropriate to wear to work, and they have been in effect, in all walks of life, for decades. While it seems that today many people have second thoughts about them, I believe they are put in place for a reason.


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話題及討論對象不確定,所以思路隨意發(fā)散


Some people think that individuals are more dependent on each other, while others think that individuals are becoming more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 2016年11月5日大陸A類考題


這道考題屬于典型的發(fā)散類題目,寫作的關鍵是對整個話題庫完整的認識。越是抽象看似討論對象不確定的題目,越是考查大家抓重點的能力。

口語考試中,只要所說內容不跑題,我們可以反復使用條件狀語從句來舉例說明if… 或者when…


但是,寫作絕對不可以。寫作內容一定是論證最具有代表性、最有力度的內容。


大作文審題時,大家一定要問自己題目最有可能涉及的話題范圍是什么。本題表面是論證人與人之間的關系,但如果對考題特征和話題庫夠了解,就可以判斷出實際包含的話題是科技進步和全球化。


順著這個思路,不少同學會判斷人與人之間的依懶性是增強的,比如即時的溝通交流,比如團隊中的合作互助。這沒錯,但是跟進一步思考,不難發(fā)現:正是因為如此,現在人們的獨立自主性在增強。


這道題算是難度較大的考題,需要大家完整復習,方可破解。


具體參考范文:

Some people think that there is a growing level of individuals’ dependency on those around us, e.g., families, friends and work colleagues. However, I do not think that this is the case.


Independence has become more predominant due to modern technologies increasing our exposure to global events. We are therefore becoming more educated and well informed, and as a result, we are able to be more open minded than in the past. This exposure is further encouraging us to have more life enriching experiences such as travelling and studying abroad which promote a stronger sense of independence within us.

文章第一個立論段首先提出的是:Independence has become more predominant due to modern technologies increasing our exposure to global events.


意思是科技開闊了我們的視野,讓我們了解全世界。具體論證提出了人們如今可以通過出國讀書和旅行來豐富自己的閱歷,這一切其實是promote a stronger sense of independence within us.


An increasing level of independence can also be noted through the way people choose to perform everyday tasks, such as shopping, banking and even business transactions. Instead of meeting others face to face, many daily tasks today can be accomplished on our own with the access to the Internet. Thus, many of us can arrange daily routines according to our personal needs and habits.

然后,文章第二個立論段提出了:An increasing level of independence can also be noted through the way people choose to perform every tasks, such as shopping, banking and even business transactions.

意思是人們可以靈活選擇從事日常事務的方式,并因此論證得出了結論:Many of us can arrange daily routines according to our personal needs and habits.


It is true that there are still existing factors that lead people to remain dependent. Higher demand of life and the resulting increases in the cost of living prevent some especially young adults to possess individual assets such as accommodation and transport. In this case the individual is more prone to seek assistance from families and friends.

當然有側重的文章結構還需要讓步段。在本題中,我們讓步段選用的是現代生活中熱門的生活成本問題:


Higher demand of life and the resulting increases in the cost of living prevent some especially young adults to possess individual assets such as accommodation and transport.


However, I believe that the independent thinking that is expanding in modern times through greater global exposure will outweigh the hurdles of higher living costs and will ultimately create a gradual increase in the level of individual independence.

最后,我們總結強調中心觀點:There is a gradual increase in the level of individual independence.


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